I am writing a lyric that explains a network.
So please tell me where to fix my broken English.

— lyric —
What is a network, あいつは劣悪, な環境でも届ける絶対 get by
Points are connected, that is a network
You don’t have to think hard, 難しくすんのは自分だ
●と●が繋がってるだけそれがネットワーク
logistics (distribution network) and your brain, neural network,
a point and a point connected and transmit something.
Neuron and Neuron を繋げるシナプス
ElonとERONが繋がる 日が来る

Lang-8で文章直してくれる人求む!!!
このコメント欄でもいいよ!

Please fix my broken English at Lang-8 or comment section!

削除しちゃいました。TikTok動画。

https://www.tiktok.com/@kenichitakai/video/6895037527061728514